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First Page: Entrata – Suspense

First Page: Entrata – Suspense

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It was just an ordinary Saturday night for Isabelle Nelson.

After working all day, it was finally 10:40 and her crew had left, so with her paperwork finished and most of the restaurant lights turned off, she did a quick run through one more time to make sure all of the equipment was properly shut down.

After verifying that it was, she shut off the last of the back lights and went to the front of the building, entering the office and squatting down the spin the combination on the safe. Once it was locked, she was ready to go. Standing up straight, she grabbed the cup of pop she had poured herself and grabbed her keys. Turning off the office light, she walked out and shut the door behind her. Then she stood in front of the alarm until the green light told her it was ready and she could set the alarm. Once the beeping began, she quickly walked out of the building, locking the door behind her and then making her way out to her car.

It had been a very long day, and all she wanted to do was go home, take her shoes off, and finally relax. She had worked 11 to close, which was nothing out of the ordinary, but seeing as she was having problems at her house, she had to run to Wal-Mart that morning to get some necessities.

At 19, Belle still lived at home with her parents. Normally this was no problem, but recently when her parents accepted an old couch from an old friend, their house became infested with bed bugs.

Bed bugs—tiny little demons that invaded your home and ruined your life.

Okay, they hadn’t really ruined her life, but they were still extremely inconvenient. Nearly everything in the house had to be thrown out—what hadn’t been thrown out had been disinfected and put into thick black garbage bags and stored in the trunk.

The trunk because Belle was currently living out of her car.

When she went home, she would go into her family’s camper in the backyard to get a shower and use the bathroom, then she would change into pajamas and go out to her car. She already had a pillow in her backseat, but she kept her comforter in their camper as she didn’t want anyone at her work to know that she was living like a homeless person.

It was humiliating and exhausting, not to mention uncomfortable.

Sighing as she got to her car, she pulled out her car keys to unlock the door. Belle opened the door and slid into the driver’s seat, leaving the door open and one foot outside the car as she reached across the counsel to put her purse in the passenger seat, then she placed her Diet Pepsi in the cup holder. As she slid the key into the ignition, she was startled by the sudden sound of footsteps pounding on the pavement—and it sounded like they were headed right toward her.

First Page: Random Memories – Romance

First Page: Random Memories – Romance

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It’s sunset time. Birds are flying home. The city is lighting up, will it rain or no?

“Is it going to rain?” Emily wants to know. Nat and Ram shrug, who cares? It’s around 8.p.m., Emily, Ram and Natasha are up in their usual place: Lying flat on the terrace, eyes glued to the sky. Anything seems possible here and now. You just lie down watching the sky with stars, clouds and random objects. You can lose yourself in smoky dreams or get into a heated conversation in the dark emptiness.

Today, Emily feels talkative. Something is disturbing her.

“What’s the plan tonight?” Emily wonders.

“What about booze and fun?” Natasha suggests. The day is dead, time for some booze to kill the night. The beers are in a puddle of fresh dew trickling from the surface of the cans. Ram throws a can each to Nat and Emily. Cheers!

This is their last semester together, and looking back it has been a bland experience.

“Do you think sometime in future, maybe we three will meet?” Emily wonders.

“Why wouldn’t we?” Ram rewonders.

“We should stay in touch forever” Nat asserts feeling nostalgic and drunk.

Emily is cupping her beer can, lost and uninterested. So Ram wants to know if she gave up booze. “No, just don’t feel like tonight” Emily replies sounding sad. It is disturbing to see Emily being so sad these few days. Ram downs his can at one go to drown the uneasiness rising in his stomach. “Well girls, how about a picnic before exams?” Ram suggests.

Nat and Emily look on curious.

“We can go off-roads, to the lake, waterfalls, forests, do some trekking.” Ram explains.

“That would be great: miles and miles of greenery, blue skies and sparkling water” Nat replies. It sounds sarcastic though her mouth is bent into a smile.

“So when do we slot this trip?” Ram asks eagerly.

Emily is disturbed and her senses are pleasantly numb to her environment. Nat senses Emily’s aloofness and it intrigues her. Emily always kept stuff to herself: bottle up and burst out, that’s her.

“Emi, how is Brian?” Nat inquires. His name shoots into Emily’s heart and she can see Emily fold tighter into a bud.

“He is good” Emily replies non-committal. Nat doesn’t want to dig deeper right now or Emily might just close up.

None of them feels like talking. Emily’s brain is flooded with a whirlpool of thoughts. Ram’s mind feels empty so he looks for something to think. And his mind just stays empty. So he lets it be. He instead distracts his mind contemplating Em and Nat, trying to guess at their thought processes. Seeing a lot of each other these past three years, Em and Nat seem to have developed a remarkably similar body language. Em is leaning her head to the wall, eyes closed just like Nat, hands hugging the body. He feels bored after a while so walks up and down the terrace.

If he looks down, he can see a bunch of people hanging around and he could barely recognise them. He stares skyward, it is an empty box after all the jewels are removed. He wonders when was the last time he seen some stars. It seems ages ago. He plonks himself on the wall of the terrace far and away from anyone’s view.