Mar 1 2008
Welcome to Query Saturday. Individual authors anonymously send a query to be read and critiqued by the Dear Author community of authors, readers and industry others. Anyone is welcome to comment. Published authors may do so under their own name or anonymously.
Readers, though, the way that I look at it is this: Would the hook itself interest you in reading the book. If yes, what interests you and if not, what would you change to make it more appealing?
Devotion to duty, loyalty and fidelity are the trademarks of Roarke "The Iceman" Campbell, Commander of the Special Ops Team Phantom Warriors, in the year 2244. He is cold and calm under fire and has never wavered from a mission no matter the difficulties or possible outcome. At least, until his icy shell is thawed by F.A.W.N., a breeder in the enemy’s elite Esalen Center where his mission has taken him in deep cover.
This is the premise for my recently completed novel, PHANTOM WARRIORS: ICEMAN, a 74,000 word futuristic romance novel that takes the reader from the shores of Vancouver to the heart of the UIS breeding program in Big Sur spanning the years 2244 to 2246.
Roarke has always lived for his duty to his team and country. When a plot to overtake their neighbors by the U.I.S. Board Of Directors is discovered, and he is chosen to infiltrate the enemy and strike at the heart of their plot, he accepts the dangerous assignment and the changes it will bring with the reputation he had earned. Dispassionately and objectively, he endures a long uncomfortable training and permanent physical changes. His mission undercover leads to an encounter with a woman who would test all his beliefs of personal freedom, duty, and honor.
F.A.W.N., a class A breeder and citizen of the U.I.S., has never fit in with her society. She is gentle and loving with her charges in the nurseries where she was assigned while waiting to be called into breeding service. She is uncomfortable with the values that she and all citizens have been taught since childhood but she knows of no other life. When she is called into service and selected to breed the Chairman of the Board’s heir, she is sent to the Esalen Center where she is instantly attracted to one of the elite Centurion guards.
A little about me. I am a Bakery/Deli supervisor for a grocery store chain where I have worked for almost 25 years. I began writing almost accidentally when I discovered fan fiction and was tempted to try my hand at telling one of the stories that crowded my imagination. Several of the other authors encouraged me to enter one of the contests at Romance At Heart magazine. I won the first one I entered with my short story called GUARDED HEARTS in January 2004. PHANTOM WARRIORS: ICEMAN is an expansion of my third entry into one of Romance At Heart’s contests.
I expanded PHANTOM WARRIORS: ICEMAN with the intention to submitting it for publishing. It is the first of a four book series. I would be pleased to send you the completed manuscript at your request. Thank you for taking the time to consider my work.
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