Welcome to Query Saturday. Individual authors anonymously send a query to be read and critiqued by the Dear Author community of authors, readers and industry others. Anyone is welcome to comment. Published authors may do so under their own name or anonymously. Readers, though, the way that I look at it is this: If the hook were on the back of a book, would you buy it? If you would, what interests you? If not, what would make you pick it up?
Dear Mr. XXXX,
I read on www.agentquery.com that you are interested in publishing fantasy fiction. I think that Cursed, the first novel in my Nikolai family series, might interest you.
Have you ever had a nightmare so vivid that if haunted you wherever you go? What if you discovered that the people in the nightmare were real and had died in the manner you dreamt the night before? Would you be able to brush it off as coincidence or would you dig deeper?
These are the questions the Professor Emerald Nikolai must resolve in my novel. Last night Emerald had a nightmare of a local woman being killed. It was so vivid she woke up with the woman’s pleas following her into the day. This is not the first time this has happened. In an attempt to brush it off as a coincidence she is thrown into the middle of game without understanding why. As piece by piece of the puzzle comes through Emerald is discovering that the recent nightmares and killings might all be tied together. As her two sisters rush in to help the game heats up as one of them is targeted next. When the puzzle becomes complete it might be closer to home then she imaged.
Cursed is my first novel. The completed manuscript is available upon request. I have enclosed the first 50 pages and a SASE for your convenience. Thank you for your generous time. I look forward to hearing from you soon.