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Readers, though, the way that I look at it is this: Would the hook itself interest you in reading the book. If yes, what interests you and if not, what would you change to make it more appealing?
Dear Ms. Agent,
I appreciate the place (author’s name) has carved for herself writing fantasy and romance that doesn’t follow her characters into the bedroom. Since you represent her, I’d like to offer my fantasy romance, “Between Earth and Fire,” for your consideration.
Bold, clever Maurwyn Respen plans to govern her ancestral home herself–just as soon as she rids herself of the earth tremors her rare bouts of anger seem to cause. Yet her strange, elemental powers prove useful. A vengeful mage seeks to crush her homeland and only the soldier Xanier knows where to find him. Xan is smart, sly, and deliciously fun to tease, but-something’s wrong. Not with earthquakes or fire, but with the man she’s grown to love. Xan isn’t who he claims to be–and Maurwyn must defeat him before he destroys her people.
This is one of two novels I’ve written about the Respen family and I have plans for others. However, “Between Earth and Fire” can certainly stand alone.
I’ve enclosed a short synopsis, first chapter, and a S.A.S.E. for your convenience.
Thank you for your time,
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