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I’ve hidden the content and hidden the author’s comments because this first page is about getting critique on unpublished manuscripts not a forum for authors to submit material that is already published. I feel like it is an inappropriate use of the commenter’s time who reads and provides comments for free.
This is partly my fault. I think I don’t do a good job of identifying that this is for unpublished manuscripts. I apologize to the DA commenting crew and pledge to do better in the future.
Before each page goes up, I try to email the author and alert them that the page will be up for critique. In the future, all emails will emphasize that the piece must be unpublished. Thanks.
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