Jun 16 2010
Dear Ms. Cain:
I asked for all the erotic romances published by Carina Press in June because I have been desperate for a good erotic romance. I don’t know where they have all gone. Yours was sent to me with a number of others and I read all five in a row. Alien Revealed is about 100 pages long and is a futuristic. Because of its length, I think the story suffered in terms of sufficiency. What I mean by that is a futuristic requires world building and its hard, I think, to create a fully imagined future world and a great romance in under 100 pages.
Alinna Gaerrii is an Inarrii agent who was sent to observe humans on earth and report these findings back to her people in advance of treaty overtures the Inarrii would like to make. Her observation pod crashes near an understaffed military base which is currently playing host to Major David Brown and his team of pilots who were training for a Starforce mission. Brown’s team, however, must receive the okay from a psychtech. Brown’s base is informed of downed military crafts and is sent out to search, rescue and investigate.
So many questions arose. Like why did Brown only have command of pilots. Aren’t pilots trained to do one thing and there are other soldiers trained to do other things? Why would a bunch of pilots be sent for a search and investigation of a downed military aircraft? Wouldn’t that be better suited for people trained to actually conduct searches and investigations? I know that you mentioned that the station was understaffed but I admit I figured a crew would consist of some group of people other than just pilots.
When Brown and his inept crew of search, rescue and investigate arrive they find Alinna and immediately assume that she is Dr. MacPherson, the psychtech. If Brown and his crew are responsible for Earth safety, we are all doomed because even after Brown figures out that Alinna isn’t who she says she is, he still wants to bone her. (But she’s a good alien so all is well).
Alinna catches on quick and through her superior alien technology is able to hack into the base’s mainframe and download into her memory bank. Inarrii are touch sensitive creatures and can absorb people’s memories and thoughts.
Alinna is instantly attracted to Brown and finds that he could pass as an Inarrii if only he had the L’inar. Alinna is a highly sexual creature. Sex helps the telepathic Inarrii to relieve stress and control emotions. The L’inar are like veins that run around the body, forming tattoo like impressions on the skin and when the men are aroused, the lines rise in tight ridges. I found it a little incredible that something so distinctive to the Inarrii wouldn’t be a big deal in terms of attractiveness for Alinna. Growing up with a certain standard of beauty, one would think that an Inarrii would find those ridges to be a desirable trait and would actually miss those lines if they were missing. But Alinna doesn’t ever think about that. There was another point where David was running his hand over the curve of her buttocks, tracing her L’inar lines.
Unlike some Inarrii women, she had several stray lines curling over her ass cheeks to trial down to her sex from behind. Few Inarrii men thought to stroke them, and David’s touch delighted her and teased her with its primal focus.
I thought this was pretty unbelievable. A race of creatures who have sex all the time and whose L’inar are sexually stimulated wouldn’t have thought to trace all these lines on her body a hundred times? I get that we were supposed to see David as this superior being but these types of things actually reduce credibility of the story. Then there was the fact that Alinna had never heard of having anal. David had brought something new to her table. But really? Again, not believable.
Alinna and David engage in sex. First, though, its only dream sex. Then it is actual person to alien sex. And yes, it is hot and sexy but the conflict surrounding the story sped by at hyperspeed as so much is attempted to be shoehorned in such as Alinna’s backstory, the need for the Inarrii to connect with humans, the bad aliens who are attempted to destroy the Inarri (and other peaceful people). Some of the story is relayed through a convenient transfer of memories so we, the reader, are filled in on all kinds of information when Alinna obtains memories or thoughts through David or Alinna passes thoughts and memories to David.
There were too many questions that the worldbuilding left unanswered and the sexual attraction seemed more of necessity, particularly for Alinna, than one born out of love. I liked the voice and wonder if a full length novel would have resolved so many of the problems I had with this story. C-