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REVIEW: Entwined and Entangled by Colette Gale

Dear Ms. Gale,

This premise had ‘January’ written all over it. The erotic adventures of Jane (from the Tarzan books)? It sounded like a fun read to me. Unfortunately, it wasn’t what I had in mind. I had imagined this to be an erotic retelling of Jane and Tarzan. Instead, this is a series that will go down for me in the category of “Good concept, hated execution”. For those that wish to play at home, this is a self-published series. Meant to be serialized like the old novels of yesteryear, this story will be released in short chunks over time.

Entwined, Entangled by Colette GaleEntwined is the first of the series. It starts with Jane Clemons, her father the professor, and Effie, Jane’s servant/companion. Jane’s fiance disappeared years ago into the jungle, and they have returned to Madagascar to look for him or his remains. Also accompanying them is Kellen Darkdale, who was last with Jane’s fiance. These characters are straight out of a bad Disney cliche pile. Darkdale, who is clearly a villain based on the name alone, is the lecherous hunter who tries to rape Jane whenever she has a moment to herself. Jane’s father is absent minded and barely there, mentally. Effie? She is described as blond but talks like Mammy. I don’t know what to think.

They arrive in Madagascar, Darkdale tries to rape Jane in her room, and she is saved by Tarzan. Then, despite the rape attempt, she tells no one, just chalks it up to poor judgment on Darkdale’s behalf. Meanwhile, she lusts over Tarzan and lets him fondle her breasts. Later on, she’s swimming on a pool and gets tangled on some vines and Tarzan is there to retrieve her again, after some heavy petting.

Tarzan (though he is never refferred to as that in the books) is charmingly adorable. He’s shy. He stops touching Jane when he misinterprets what she wants. He finds her beautiful but doesn’t know how to be around a woman. I loved seeing him on the page and thought you did a great job with him. By the time this short novella left off on a cliffhanger, I bought the next one. So far, so good. Despite the goofy caricatures and the fact that Jane pays not a bit of attention to Darkdale’s rape attempts, I enjoyed it. B for Entwined.

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Entwined, Entangled by Colette GaleEntangled is where you jump the shark, and then you take it out back and shoot it, and then you back up the car and run over it one more time. How did things go so wrong from one story to the next? These are short tales, so I tried not to give too many spoilers to the first one, but I feel obligated to lay it all out on the table for #2. Here we go. If you don’t like spoilers, stop reading right here.

[spoiler effect=”blind”]Entangled picks up where Jane’s fiance, Jonathan, returns. Jonathan has been living with natives for the last few years. Immediately after reuniting with happy Jane, he takes her in the back so they can get reacquainted. As in, he pulls out his penis and shoves it into her mouth so she can blow him. I’m already tired of Jonathan at this point. Jane seems to be too, as she’s bored while blowing him and entertains herself by imagining Tarzan.The next evening, Jane’s father is occupied with his research so Jane wanders off into the jungle with her fiance. He lights up the equivalent of a jungle-joint over a lamp and makes Jane breathe in the smoke. When she’s high, they make love in a hot spring in the middle of the jungle. Jane’s tripping on pheromones and smoke, so she almost doesn’t notice the surprise of Kellen Darkdale taking her up the ass. I am so uncomfortable at this point. Jane doesn’t want Darkdale, but she’s drugged and her fiance is telling her that she’ll like it, so she lets Darkdale have her ‘other’ virginity. She wakes up later and is upset at Jonathan over what happened, but it seems that he promised Darkdale that he could do a three way with Jane if Darkdale brought her to Madagascar, and too bad for Jane. Jane is a little miffed but she enjoyed that ‘dark pleasure’ so she keeps her unhappiness to herself.

I am outraged, as the reader. You just raped and drugged the heroine and let the raping villain from the first story have her in the back door? I am appalled. I realize these are erotic adventures, so if Jane wants to spread her wild oats across Madagascar, so be it. If she wants to sleep with twenty men, so be it. But I did not sign up for rape and surprise-anal. To make matters worse, Jane is only mildly bothered by any of this. There go my hopes of her taking a machete to their penises in the next installment.

Some plot things happen, and Jane is spirited away by Tarzan to his jungle hideout, which seems to have been inspired by the Disney movie. She sleeps, exhausted.

Next, we are treated to a rather unsexy scene between Effie-Mammy and the Professor Dad, who possesses an enormous purple-headed rod. You’re welcome for that mental image.

Then, she wakes up and there’s another sweet scene with Tarzan that moves to sexy. I am increasingly disappointed that this story is not just about the two of them. They have sex, and Jane passes out again. When she wakes up, she is back in her own bed. Her fiance is relieved she is back, and they go walking in the jungle again. She is soaking in a hot spring when the fiance disappears, and she gets out of the water only to find that they have been discovered by spear wielding savages. The savages poke and prod naked Jane, and take both Jane and Jonathan back to their village. Jane is imprisoned in a hut, but not Jonathan. He decides that night that he will come by and comfort Jane, which involves fondling her and having sex with her while she’s tied up and captive. What a sweet prince of a man.

This story ends on a cliffhanger when Jane is brought before the tribe and it is announced that those spear-wielding villagers find her to be a fertility goddess and she must do whatever they say. I have visions of Jane sleeping with the entire village, at once, so I’m rather relieved the story is over. I’m uncomfortable to a great degree with the ‘tribal orgy’ setup because it feels very culturally insensitive. I’m uncomfortable even more with how Jane is handled. She’s not the one making the erotic choices. So far it seems that someone simply decides they want to have sex with her, they have sex with her, and then the story just moves on to the next sexual encounter with no emotional ties whatsoever. I’m really uncomfortable with the drugging and rape and Jane’s lack of reaction. I don’t recall if Jane said ‘no’ in the actual scene but her choices were taken from her by the drug and couple that with how much she did not want Darkdale in the first book? I view it as rape.

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You also have an uncanny knack for describing things in an incredibly unsexy way. I find this baffling as you are an erotica writer.

Her quim burgeoned, swelling and filling, throbbing like a huge organ between her legs.

and

His tongue thrust boldly into her mouth, startling Jane with its abrupt invasion. But his kiss was sensual and thorough, and before long, her insides became soft and wavery. Their mouths smashed and slipped together, tongues tangling and teeth nibbling in desperation to make up for their lost time.
That sounds more like a feeding frenzy.

Overall, I’m not convinced. You can write in an entertaining way, but I want Jane to be an active participant, not just a receptacle. Tarzan is likeable enough, but he’s not on the page very often. Everyone else in the story repulses me and when they’re not actively repelling me, I find this entire set-up uncomfortably like fanfiction of the Disney movie. As self-published books go, the covers are appealing and the content is very clean and readable.

In addition, $2.99 for 80 pages would not bother me too much if it was a complete story. But $6 for two chunks of a larger story? And I’m left at the end with no resolution and a rapidly devolving plot? All I can say is thank goodness that Amazon lets you return books.

B for the first one. D for the last. A very grudging D.

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January Janes

January likes a little bit of everything. She's partial to unique paranormals, erotic romances, contemporary, and YA. She has a fondness for novellas and trying self-published works, though more of those are misses than hits. She still refuses to read anything that smells like literary fiction. January also changes this bio on a regular basis depending on her reading mood.

18 Comments

  1. Cassie
    Apr 16, 2012 @ 15:05:52

    Hmm. Guess this will be the new breakout bestseller right up there with all the ones with titillation as the plot. Ugh. Just ugh.

  2. theo
    Apr 16, 2012 @ 15:33:19

    Unfortunately, you’re getting charged for poor writing when you can find much better on fanfiction sites so what you’re reading is badly written fan fiction with a decent cover. And I do say fan fiction because she has no original characters and in fact, started with an “erotic retelling of Phantom of the Opera” which was one BDSM scene after another, poorly strung together.

    Stick to the free fan fiction sites. This type of thing poses the question of the milk and the cow, yes?

  3. Bren
    Apr 16, 2012 @ 15:56:47

    This review has left me “soft and wavery” inside. What a coincidence. Think I need to visit the bathroom now.

  4. Carin
    Apr 16, 2012 @ 18:34:17

    Thanks for taking one for the team, January! I would love to read a GOOD Tarzan/Jane erotic retelling. Bummer that this is not it. It gives me the yucks just reading your review, so again, thank you for the heads up.

  5. DA_January
    Apr 16, 2012 @ 19:52:34

    @theo: I don’t mind if it’s a shorter fanfic piece. I just want what I’m purchasing to be good and not full of insanity.

  6. DA_January
    Apr 16, 2012 @ 19:53:23

    @Carin: I would too – I think it is a trope that could be a lot of fun with an erotic angle. If anyone knows of a good one, I’m open to suggestions/comparisons.

  7. Jill Sorenson
    Apr 16, 2012 @ 19:58:21

    I haven’t read it, but Jill Myles has a Tarzan/Jane type of story, Island Heat.

  8. AnimeJune
    Apr 16, 2012 @ 22:41:19

    Ha, this review made me laugh very, very hard – particularly the purple-headed rod comment. But of course, the only guy I see is the Disney-animated version of Jane’s dad so that just does all kinds of mind-fucky things to my subconscious.

  9. Carin
    Apr 17, 2012 @ 11:14:57

    @Jill Sorensen – thanks! The Jill Myles book looks good and I think I’ll give it a try.

  10. Jenny Lyn
    Apr 17, 2012 @ 11:29:53

    And such pretty, professional looking covers, too. *sigh* It sounds more like “Jane Does the Jungle” in nicer packaging.

  11. tripoli
    Apr 17, 2012 @ 14:18:25

    If I never read the words “tongues tangling” again, it’ll be too soon. Can we please axe that phrase forever?

  12. TKF
    Apr 17, 2012 @ 15:32:30

    This is another pen name for Colleen Gleason. I remember so many people loving her Regency era Buffy fan fic (which is what I always thought the Gardella vampires series was). I’m surprised to see that this series is so ghastly though, since she’s a multipublished bestselling author.

  13. theo
    Apr 17, 2012 @ 16:21:09

    @TKF: NO! Seriously? I would never have guessed.

    @DA_January: I’ll pay quite a bit for a book that’s well written and satisfying, regardless if it’s FF or not, but I don’t have money to waste on garbage. I read a bit of her first one and it went in the garbage. I didn’t feel in good conscience that I could even perpetrate that trash on some unsuspecting used book buyer. Since I wasted my money once, I won’t do it again.

    And that’s so surprising because I have two Colleen Gleason books on my shelf. It’s been forever since I’ve read them, they were early books, but still…what a shock to me.

  14. Moriah Jovan
    Apr 17, 2012 @ 16:28:30

    @TKF:

    I’m surprised to see that this series is so ghastly though, since she’s a multipublished bestselling author.

    @theo:

    And that’s so surprising because I have two Colleen Gleason books on my shelf. It’s been forever since I’ve read them, they were early books, but still…what a shock to me.

    This would be a demonstration of how heavily some authors are edited by someone else and then, when let loose without an editor, show their true ability.

  15. Rebecca
    Apr 17, 2012 @ 21:05:14

    Bwahahaha those excerpts were hilarious, although I doubt that was the intent.

  16. Kelly
    Apr 17, 2012 @ 21:23:27

    My interpretation of why the scenes with Jonathan are written in the way they are is that we are supposed to go on the journey with Jane as she finds out that Jonathan is a real asshole. I think they are supposed to be jarring, to elicit responses from Jane and from us. We are just smarter than Jane is, and we see it from the beginning.
    Don’t many of these books have an element of the woman not having much of a choice in sexual partners in the beginning? As the novel goes on, they are able to make more choices in who they have sex with. We just haven’t gotten to that part yet, maybe. But Colette does a great job of making us dislike Jonathan. Maybe that is the point.

  17. Mara
    Apr 18, 2012 @ 07:21:28

    I thought they were really fun reads. I got that they were supposed to be a bit over the top, and enjoyed the – very hot – ride.

  18. DJ
    Jun 14, 2014 @ 22:54:26

    Your review is spot on. It is a shame but I started out liking Jane and Tarzan. Seemed like they had great possibilities. But that just didn’t happen. I spent six dollars on the series and that’s it for me. Hated some…most of the characters. I just thought “Tarzan.. You can do better than Jane.” In my mind she has left the Island and is never coming back.

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