Jun 15 2007
Dear Mrs Connolly,
I love your Georgian historical series featuring Richard and Rose. Your Regency novel didn’t work as well for me so when you wrote offering a chance to read a paranormal, and one including American characters, I was intrigued and curious as to what I’d think of it. Well, some parts are okay while others are annoying.
Dev Wyvern is Welsh, tall, dark and sexy as sin. He’s also a shapeshifter. When he walks into Alix Lancaster’s jewelry shop she knows her brother, Clay, is setting a trap for him. Clay is a member of the PHR, sworn enemies of all Talents. So does Alix betray her brother by warning Dev, or let him walk into a lethal snare?
Dev is drawn to Alix like few other women. But can he trust her? Sent by the enigmatic Cristos, the boss of Department 57, to expose a PHR cell, he finds love and danger waiting for him. He takes both of them on, and has to make a choice; will she forgive him if he destroys the brother of the woman he loves?
Will they get out alive?
When I started reading “Jewel of the Dragon” I didn’t know it was a series (the first) but I quickly caught on. The shear number of different Talents plus all the info dumping about Department 57 and how they work and what they are and where they are and how they don’t usually work for any government agency (Interpol, MI6, CIA, FBI, etc) except as consultants gave that away fairly quickly. All of the above did fill me in about the series but also served to bring the action to a halt as you detailed everything, sometimes several times. By the end of the book, my head was spinning from so many paranormals – wyverns (dragons), griffins, firebirds, vampires, sorcerers ….If a reader can’t find a paranormal being to suit, it’s certainly not because you haven’t offered enough choices. Oh, I have to agree with Dev that the agency head’s secretary is going to ruin her hair with so many dye jobs.
I will admit to being disappointed that once again you have a heroine lacking in self-confidence. Woefully lacking it and needing almost constant proping up by the hero. I’d love to see you write a kick-ass heroine someday. And as with almost all of your books, your hero falls almost instantly in love/lust/interest with her and is attracted to her as he’s never been to another woman. Again, I would like to see something different from you.
Then there’s the heroine’s background with a fanatical group in which she was raised to distrust all paranormal beings. The book starts off well enough and even after she falls in with the hero, she’s still not totally at ease with him. So far, so good so I thought. Until ten minutes later when suddenly she’s willing to make love with him in a semi-changed form. Then comes the point that had me scratching my head.
I noticed something that probably wouldn’t bother most readers but after a while, it did bother me. You describe the hero and his friends as all dressing in discreet luxury, having taste and class, knowing their way around a bottle of French wine and always staying in chichi hotels but then I noticed heroine’s bad brother Clay is described with a “heavy forehead,” living in a lower class neighborhood, the heroine’s clothes are ready made frump, Clay’s associates are all obnoxious — all very heavy handed descriptions on both sides here.
I thought the world-building was adequate, all powers and talents are explained in advance and you didn’t suddenly spring something on us out of the blue to explain a plot point or save the day. And a big thanks for taking care of the basics: you explain what Dev does with his clothes when he changes, how he takes care of assuming a new identity after every 60 years or so, how Talents try to spread rumors about their strengths and weaknesses to maintain an advantage. I notice little things like this while reading and hate to be pulled out of a story while I wonder what the shapeshifter’s going to do once he shifts back and is naked in public!
But, while I thank you for the opportunity to read something other than a historical novel, I think for the time being, I’m going to stick to those as I feel you do them so well. Any word on when the final two R&R books will see the light of day? C- for “Jewel of the Dragon.”