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Dear Ms Darcy,
I love the opening of your book “Twenty Hours in Boston.” The meeting of these two diehard Red Sox fans in a bar watching a baseball game is so believable. You’ve got the setting, emotions and atmosphere so real I can see them. The scene back in Aubrey’s hotel room, after Gray injures his foot kicking a brick wall in frustration over the loss to the Yankees is great. Gray’s responses to her statements, actions and questions about Vegas showgirls’ breast size are so Real Man. “Hey, if this woman strips off and offers me sex, I’ll try and be a gentleman but if she persists, I’ll go for it.” Very guy.
It’s too bad that soon Gray turns back into a Romance Man for most of the rest of the book. We do get flashes of Real Man thinking and action but not as much as I’d hoped for. Now, about Aubrey. That girl can be exasperating. First she doesn’t care that Gray left after their night of hawt sex in Boston, then when fate throws them together again, she gets all mad at him. Then denies being mad. Then sets “ground rules” for their non-relationship, then breaks them herself, which is OK but he can’t break them. Then she insists to herself that this wealthy business CEO can’t, won’t, hasn’t fallen in love with her so she’s not even going to try and give them a chance. Sigh. Very Romance Heroine. Very much behavior I’ve read in too many books over the years.
You also have quite a few plot balls up in the air as well. Maybe too many? There’s Gray’s overprotective relationship with his siblings, Gray’s mother’s history, Gray’s sister’s problems, Gray’s relationship with his best friend, Gray’s hotel casino problems. All of this on top of the romance relationship with Aubrey. You juggled them well but they took so much time away from the romance that I got frustrated. However, when you had Gray go into denial over a situation and make a decision that was so stupid, so idiotic, so unbelievable that I wanted to hurl my IPAQ at the wall, well, you lost points there. And then I’m supposed to believe the quick HEA after the major breakdown in their relationship? I’m sorry but I just can’t. The cute ending and your obvious love of and knowledge about the Red Sox redeemed a little bit of this but still, B- for you.