Mar 15 2007
Dear Ms. Michelle:
A Taste of Control is my first book by you but apparently it is the third in your Kendrian Vampire series. It is readable but very flawed. Some new twists are brought into the vampire lore, but the fantasy construct had inconsistencies. The real problem lay in the erotic portion of the erotic romance.
Rose Sinclair is on a mission to find out as much as she can about vampires at the behest of a client. She doesn’t believe in vampires but she wants to earn that $7,000 fee and thus she goes to a nightclub in search of information. There she finds more than she bargained for. Her blood and scent sings to the vampire she meets there, but he is dangerous. Another vampire, Duncan Mordoor is sent out to save her.
This book started out well. Duncan feels like he is drifting away from his brother, Ian, because of Ian’s finding his mate. He’s up for a quick lay but not much more. Once he meets Rose, however, he senses some special draw toward her. Unfortunately the soul mate idea, particularly in the paranormal romance lore, has been done to death and the idea of the vampires having one special mate is one I can hardly bring myself to care about anymore.
There is a lot of mental lusting and one of my least favorite erotic romance writing tecniques and that is the animation of the body parts. I.e., the cock that twitches, jumps, and does a little dance in the guy’s pants. Or the thrusting nipples. It’s a wonder any girl can make it through a romance book with her shirts intact. Duncan also looked at Rose with hunger in his eyes – alot. I thought someone needed to feed this poor vampire and soon.
I also wish you had left more up to the imagination. I think it’s pretty obvious when a guy starts licking a girl’s wrist and moans in excitement that the reader knows he wants her. Articulation of that fact seems redundant.
The character’s motivations were quite off to me as well. Duncan knows immediately that Rose is not a danger to him, but wavers between wiping the memories from her mind to providing more information to her (when he finds out she is resistant to the mind wipe). Rose decides that while she never believed in vampires before, Duncan should be her sperm donor and refuses to have sex with him unless he gives her a child. This was weird to me.
Rose is written as a strong female character and while I appreciated that, her stubbornness bordered on foolishness at times. One of the villians had more depth and characterization than ordinarily seen. When the story focused on the mystery of Rose’s background and how that interwove with Duncan’s history, it was much more interesting than the sexual parts of the book. C-